Inside out

Some poems and reflections on life

empty

4 Comments

worn out loving you

drained beyond my means

any time you ask

© David Earle, 2008

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4 thoughts on “empty

  1. I love this. It would actually be a Haiku if you added two more syllables in the second/middle line: 5-7-5

  2. thanks for your feedback.

    I hadn’t written a haiku since school – so I did a search and looked at this article:
    http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Haiku
    My reading is that 5-7-5 is not a strict rule and there are other qualities to also consider.

    I will probably come back to it later and reconsider it.

  3. Thank you for the link, it was informative. I’ll be less strict on myself the next time I write a Haiku.

    And perhaps this piece is perfect as is.

  4. i love this poem
    it is great
    as it is

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